I. 022

March 17th, 2012, 5:59 pm

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rawredy

March 17th, 2012, 6:50 pm

While I still like the original chapter one, I do really like the updated version as well. c:

It think it also shows more how Razmarus is compared to the original, but mostly based on how cruel he is in later sin absolving and what he does here. It fits better, I guess? The original also fit fine, too, though.

Aya_Yai

March 17th, 2012, 7:09 pm

Nicely done chapter, I maybe even like this version more. Hard to tell. :D
Damn, manga completely spoiled me. It took my half a chapter to found out, that I didn't read it from left to right. >___< :D

constant_boredom

March 17th, 2012, 8:50 pm

I like this version a lot more actually LOL I found it odd before that the magician would summon someone to be violated like that, and I legitimately thought that the man's abstinence was the reason for his treatment. The new dialogue is great at clearing all of that up though! If I'd been reading this for the first time, I'm sure nothing would have confused me. It all flows together really nicely with this revamp :)

Boolsajo

March 18th, 2012, 8:32 pm

So I guess I'm going to politely agree with everyone here and say this is an awesome redo! :>
It was a lot of fun watching you work on this, too. Now the rest of the story can move forward! 8D

janylin

March 19th, 2012, 9:23 pm

this just made the story SO much more easier to understand XD
though i'm just not used to Razzy's SAS level going up about 1000x

Cala (Guest)

April 1st, 2012, 2:33 pm

"I found it odd before that the magician would summon someone to be violated like that, and I legitimately thought that the man's abstinence was the reason for his treatment. The new dialogue is great at clearing all of that up though!"

Exactly what constant_boredom said! That said, I sort of miss the Raz/Mags smut, ahaha! Still, nice revamp! I bet you're glad to have the art a bit more consistent with the latest chapters (ex. Raz's more manly face)

SkyWithFluffyclouds

July 3rd, 2012, 11:30 am

Just got around to reading this again and I have to say it's easier to understand now.

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